Author's Note: This
piece is to tell you that this not a good bill and we should do whatever we can
to rebel against it. I am working on Sentence Fluency. Please leave comments
below to tell me what you think should with Sopa & Pipa.
Have you heard of
the Sopa & Pipa bill that the government is trying to pass. Basically they
are trying to censor the internet. There
are so many reasons that we should deny this bill. This is why the Sopa &
Pipa should not be passed.
Sopa and Pipa are
acts that are trying to censor the internet. Sopa stands for Stop Online Piracy
Act and Pipa stands for Protect IP act. They want control over websites and
will shut down any website with illegal videos, music, and etc. on them. It
might seem good but the government will most likely go to far and end up
shutting down most of the Internet.
The Internet is huge
source of information, but if this bill passes big websites like Facebook,
Twitter, and Youtube will be shutdown. For example if someone were to post a
video on Youtube that breaks any piracy laws, that means movie clips, songs,
and video games, the government will shut down all of Youtube and blame it as
Youtube's problem. Even if this bill does pass it will not stop websites from
overseas, so it could end up failing anyways.
Overall, the
Internet is a giant source for information and if they shut it down they
country will takes a major step back in technology. They are not good bills and
will end up failing anyways. So when you have a chance to help rebel this bill,
do your part and save the Internet.
Overall The essay was confusing. You should have added more reasons why you believe it is bad other than that it will shut down important sites. Your Author's note says that you are trying to persuade your audience which you could do a better job of, you mainly told us what the bill was going to do. I liked how you put your opinion into the essay, and stated things that would affect you if SOPA & PIPA were to get passed. I also liked that you decided to write a piece about this too. Remember to revise your piece because there were a lot of errors in the piece.
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