Author's Note: This was our assignment to practice writing conclusions for a fiction short story. I thought it was a good ending because of the twist. Feedback would be great.
On her way to deliver the poison apple to Snow White, the Evil Queen got hungry. She was so hungry she was about to faint. All she had was the apple; it looked so perfect. Her hand started shaking. Her face started sweating. She starts to lift the apple towards her mouth. Right as she's just about ready to take a bite………………DOMO jumps out of the bush, slaps the apple out of her hand, and throws her off the Grand Canyon!! THE END
Wow that's crazy!!! Who is DOMO????
ReplyDeleteDomo saved her life, only to end it himself. Surprise ending! You have a nice description in the beginning, particularly in how the Queen was sweating and shaking. Good job!
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