Author’s Note: This is a response for book in lit. club, Animal Farm by George Orwell. If you could give me some feedback, that would be great.
After reading the last two chapters in the book, It seems the more I hate Napoleon as a leader. From blaming everything on Snowball and breaking 3 of the 7 commandments but then just adding 2 words to make it seem okay. It just the more he does he proves to me that he is not a leader.
First of all, since Napoleon chased Snowball off the farm convinced everyone that Snowball’s a traitor. Now Napoleon is breaking the commandments like no animal should sleep in a bed or no animal should kill another animal and after the executions he added 2 words, without cause, and that made all peachy again. These commandments wouldn't have any value if he keeps changing them.
You did have a few grammatical errors, but I found it a nice post... you expressed good opinion, using good text evidence.. next time try to include some ideas from outside of the book, such as a reference to life... great job! Your posts get better each and every one.
ReplyDeleteI like how you went in depth about the commandments. I think you should reread this piece to take out some of the errors. This post really got me thinking. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you worded this post to make sure you got your message across
ReplyDeleteI agree with you and I think that Napoleon is purposefully manipulating the commandments to appease the animals while allowing him to move on with his own agenda.
ReplyDeleteI think that you showed a lot of opinion and I can tell that this book is really beginning to bug you. Continue that thought! You could go so far with it! Good job.
ReplyDeleteYou definitely showed a lot of opinion. I agree Napoleon is getting worse and worse. Your response was short, but I think you got to your point. Great job!
ReplyDeleteOpinion looked like it was your biggest thing in this response. I did very much like it. Great job Matt!
ReplyDeleteBuried in this response, are some really good thoughts, like how the changing of the language is used to pacify people. The problem is, your writing is so brief, and disorganized, that you never really give yourself a chance to convince the reader. I am concerned that you didn't even spend time to review the writing before posting it. If you would like to work on this together, I would be happy to help.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you got your message across clear and consisley. But you did have a few errors in your grammer.
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