Author’s Note: This piece is about a major decisions the main character made during my book. In this piece I am trying to use an academic voice. I am trying to work a stronger thesis and vocabulary. If you could give me some feedback that would be great.
What would you do if it was just down to you and one other tribute from your district, only one person could win and the other would die and you are fake in love with him/her, but still cared about that person? Katniss was put in that exact position. What Katniss does is one of the best decisions ever.
Breaking News! There is a new rule in the Hunger Games. As we all know the Hunger Games only allows one person to win, but in the middle of these games the gamemakers made a new rule that 2 people could win as long as they were from the same district. So Katniss sets out to find Peeta. That would be the first thing I would think when I heard the new rule, even if my other district tribute was badly injured like Peeta.
The new rule of letting 2 people win has changed again. In the end it was down to Katniss and Peeta vs. Cato, Cato is the boy from district 2. After Katniss kills Cato they hear that the rules changed back to the original way and only one person could live. Peeta offered to die so Katniss could win but, Katniss didn’t want that. Katniss had poisoness berries that would kill the second that they would get into your throat. Katniss gives one to Peeta and then they would both commit suicide, which seemed really stupid to me at first because I didn’t know their plan.
What I didn't see is that they were trying to outsmart the Gamemakers. Right before they ate the berries the gamemakers stopped them and let them both win, because otherwise there would be no winner. Then I figured out that the gamemakers had to let them both win so that there would be a winner.
The new rule of letting 2 people win has changed again. In the end it was down to Katniss and Peeta vs. Cato, Cato is the boy from district 2. After Katniss kills Cato they hear that the rules changed back to the original way and only one person could live. Peeta offered to die so Katniss could win but, Katniss didn’t want that. Katniss had poisoness berries that would kill the second that they would get into your throat. Katniss gives one to Peeta and then they would both commit suicide, which seemed really stupid to me at first because I didn’t know their plan.
What I didn't see is that they were trying to outsmart the Gamemakers. Right before they ate the berries the gamemakers stopped them and let them both win, because otherwise there would be no winner. Then I figured out that the gamemakers had to let them both win so that there would be a winner.
In the end they both won and lived happily ever after. Wrong! The capitol is very mad at Katniss’s stunt and that continues into the next book, Catching Fire. But what I think the author wants you to think about is how the right decisions is an easy decision. Just like how Katniss made the decision about the berries really fast and easy.
You had a good voice, but otherwise the post needed some work. I've read the hunger games before so I reread it as if I had no background knowledge, and it made no sense. Also some words were misspelled. Overall alright post just add some back round knowledge and check your spelling.
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